Avoid Use
thing/things
phenomenon, event,
situation (whatever "thing" it is).
a
lot of
numerous, several
really/very
extremely;
significantly
good
beneficial, positive, superb
bad
negative, maladaptive, disadvantageous
talk
about
discuss
ALL
IDIOMS
observe (not "look at");
deconstruct (not "figuring out")
speaking in 2nd person "you" 3rd person s/he, one, they
ending sentences in prepositions rearrange the sentence
(in, at, with, to, for, about, etc.)
inconsistent
tense
consistent tense
slang
(kids, bummed)
formal English (children, upset, annoyed,
etc.)
incorrect
syntax
correct syntax
Examples: I looked around and there were three other teenagers texting, and a businessman.
Better: I observed a business person and three teenagers texting.
passive voice (I was sent by him.) active voice (He sent me.)
too many of the verb "to be." action verbs
1,2,3
spell out one-nine
run-on
sentences
two separate clear sentences
overuse of any word varied vocabulary
second
person (you)
third person (he, she, it, they) or
first person when appropriate
undeveloped
paragraphs
developed paragraphs (4+ sentence minimum)
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